There were lots of minor spelling errors just double check and have a friend check for spelling errors next time. Also the fun facts could have been a little more deatailed and less reptative, because we already read most of them in the biography.
one thing that you might want to do better next time is use different sentence structure and not repeat them. ex.When Neil was there, he had gotten the honorary doctorate in the engineering from Purdue in 1970 While Neil was there he had gotten into the military and never really got to finish his bachelor’s
I feel that there is only one thing that you could have improved on this here blog. This would inclued having a different poll question then one of the question in the research question. Thank you for sharing your blog ms. Monica.
Wow! You have a lot of detail. I agree with your classmates that you should have asked for help with the editing. The small errors took away from the overall strong job you did!
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Explain the fun facts more.
ReplyDeleteThere is to much on one topic; its overwhelming to read.
ReplyDeleteExplain a little more, lot of reading.
ReplyDeleteIn your fun facts, it would make it easier to comprehend if you gave more detail.
ReplyDeleteIn your fun facts I would explain just a little bit more.
ReplyDeleteShould have checked spelling more. There are several little mistakes.
ReplyDeleteIt was confusing trying to blog answers on the questions to your make them separtae.
ReplyDeleteThere were lots of minor spelling errors just double check and have a friend check for spelling errors next time. Also the fun facts could have been a little more deatailed and less reptative, because we already read most of them in the biography.
ReplyDeleteone thing that you might want to do better next time is use different sentence structure and not repeat them. ex.When Neil was there, he had gotten the honorary doctorate in the engineering from Purdue in 1970 While Neil was there he had gotten into the military and never really got to finish his bachelor’s
ReplyDeleteDear Ms. Monica,
ReplyDeleteI feel that there is only one thing that you could have improved on this here blog. This would inclued having a different poll question then one of the question in the research question. Thank you for sharing your blog ms. Monica.
From your dear friend,
Alex
I read the entire biography and I couldn't take my eyes off it
ReplyDeleteNice details
ninja bouy out:)
I think you need to correct some spelling errors but other then, that you did great but, im kinda disapointed you didnt write on my blog....:(
ReplyDeleteWow! You have a lot of detail. I agree with your classmates that you should have asked for help with the editing. The small errors took away from the overall strong job you did!
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